Friday, December 6, 2013

Key Ingredients Feature Writing

1. Saying who "Client 9" was, "the money he had promised to pay would cover all expenses", and the description of the girl

2. That she is "pretty and petite" and which room number they booked

3. Yes

4. "She lay on a torn, moldy mattress on the floor.", "insect bites, rashes, and sores pocked her skin.", and "one skinny arm was slung over her face."

5. "Though she looked old enough to be in school..." and "except for a swollen diaper"

6. Awful, unsanitary, harsh conditions

7. Yes

8. It show's that people could have had a lot of sympathy for the kids on the second floor

9. Yes

10. "fixing a water pipe on private land in a narrow cannon", "the temperature was headed toward 100 degrees", and ""Soon flames were rushing through the brush toward Zaca Ridge."

11. "Rainfall the previous winter had been among the lowest on record in Southern California.", and "...about 50 miles north of Solvang"

12. Showing how and where a fire started

13. "...the Zaca made a run"

14. Yes

15. "A decade ago, the agency spent $307 million on fire suppression.", "Last year, it spent $1.37 billion.", and "In California, state wildfire spending has shot up 150% in the last decade, to more than $1 billion a year."

16. "Last year, it spent $1.37 billion."

17. Yes

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